In revising my thesis, I have responded to all comments raised by the Examiners and College, as outlined below/ included in the attached* revisions table.
Please provide enough details of the change in the thesis to help your faculty and the DGS to confirm that you have effectively accommodated the comment / recommendation.
Avoid rejecting examiner comments/recommendations. (Approach the feedback like reviewer feedback for a journal article submission is advisable – rejecting reviewer feedback often means your article won’t be accepted). Recommendations that you’d like to reject can sometimes be accommodated / agreed with by acknowledging as alternate perspectives or limitations in the research limitations/future research avenues sections at the end of the thesis.
*Please feel free to attach a Word or Excel document including the examiners' comments and how you have addressed them. The following table includes suggested headings as well as examples of responses:
EXAMINER1
COMMENTS |
Candidate’s Response |
Changes Made |
Page number |
Chapter 2: (2.5.2)
Enhancing the justification for smoking cessation campaigns' emotional impact by including specific examples, visuals, and a discussion | Accepted | More examples and justifications have been added. | 99-100 |
Chapter 3: (3.4.3)
The appropriateness of using the PAD model (Pleasure, Arousal, Dominance) to evaluate tobacco control measures | Agreed | Justification added, including clarification of applying emotional states (PAD) to examine the impact of stimuli (anti-smoking initiatives) on smoking cessation intentions - refer to Figure 3.5. | 142-143 |
Chapter 6: (6.8)
Justify the survey items that the student has used to evaluate 'anti-smoking' initiatives and communication, as well as how these can be evaluated collectively. | Accepted | Justification added. PAD model items and approach follows previous research supports studies adopting the holistic perspective (Mehrabian, 1996)and distinct variables (Cheng & Huang, 2022; Krause et al., 2020; Yang et al., 2020). However, I acknowledge theexaminer's valid concern regarding the diversity of these initiatives and the potential challenges of a double-barrelled approach. This limitation has been explicitly noted in the thesis limitations. | 303 304 305 |